Ok.. so I'd love to get peoples opinions on this. I write all the time, and this is an extract from one of my attempts at 'the novel'.
It's the first three paragraphs of my story about a girl called Rhian Carlyle. Science dictates her world. The head of the state controls everything about everyone in Falkore; when they're born, where they live, their job, even who they marry. This is a story about Rhian's life.
Impatience. Apparently one of my main characteristics. So everybody tells me, anyway (well mostly Ebbi.) You could say I've been impatient since birth; two weeks before the arrival date Baby 507 entered the world, blessed with the